Nice, warm colors! And I think you could clean up part of the inking that sticks out a bit (and shouldn't really be there).
Haha, otherwise this is great
Also, I think you could fix the flicks or ticks the inking makes when you draw curves or lines if you went to (in your SAI menu) "Others (O)" -> "Options" -> "Digitizer Support" and set "Click Detection Pressure" around 10-35. You may also want to experiment a bit with the stabilizer. +Right-click on the "Pen" tool and experiment with "Pressure Stabilizer".
Otherwise, just check out this pen setting/inking tut (really good for cartoony inking!) [link]
Thanks for the reminder~ I accidentally forgot to save my settings last time and I didn't resubmit them! That and my density settings weren't set at 100%. That's why you can see through my lineart. Anyway, I did what you said and my lines do look better. Unfortunately, I was drawing this at 2 AM and my tired mind didn't save the project as a SAI file but only as a JPG file. It was too late to fix the problem. On the bright side, this was just a fun project, nothing serious. Just a new ID was all I needed.